29 Jan Dumplin’
-The teacher wasn’t really satisfied with the paper, here is the feedback I have received if you are interested.
-The text is not fluent.
-Hulu’s Series is not a Netflix show as stated in the paper.
-I need a re-writing of the paper attached about the Netflix movie, Dumplin’. I need one coherent& fluent text rather than chapters.The teacher wasn’t satisfied about the paper and how it is formulated. So what I need is a text that is a text formulated by a strong thesis. I was told that I could imagine the conclusion part as an introduction.
-Additionally, I need 5 additional sources about Fat Studies in the bibliography. Sources that I could use, if I want to write further about the movie. This paper only has film reviews and it wasn’t enough.
-The Thesis Statement should be 1,5 spaced rather than double spaced.
-This is for a Fat Studies class where we study History of Fat in the U.S, Fat Feminism, Fatness& Post Feminism.
– I had to correct the quotation marks since movies should be written in italics.